TEENAGE ZOMBIE FLICK

[Mods]

Wow, I must be a hero. I sat there and read the whole script. Is it gonna be a 15 or and 18?

Very nice...certain things work well, some lines made me crack. The suspense could work very well, and the zombie screams is an excellent idea.

I must admit that I was sitting here all alone, and just as I read the zombie scream bit my cat jumped onto my keyboard and I got a real shock...hehe


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PS, I'd like to read more

[deanl]

cool glad you liked it. what lines worked for you and what did'nt.

[deanl]

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[ilpostino]

I really liked it, funny and tense. I like the Graham Gooche thing funny as fuck. All I'd say is learn how to fomat a script, you don't need things like crash zoom in a script or mid shot just things like angle on. Syd fields screenplay book would be a good place to start.

Very good!

[deanl]

Glad you liked it. Im trying to put a site together so I can post the full script and story boards Ive done. I've never made a site before and im finding it a little hard. Anyway the reasons I have all the camera moves in the script is because its was realy meant to be a for my eyes only script and all the acters were getting there lines on notes.

[assyrix]

I love horror slapstick hence I found your script a good read. Looking forward to the rest of it.

[eddie]

I like the beginning, didnt read it all. But my advice is dont post the rest up on here, someone could easilly steal some of your ideas. Just get on with it and make the film.

[Sian105]

I liked it. funny and silly and gross and cool. Nice.

The main thing I noticed was "is it set in america or the uk?" The dialogue is full of americanisms and colloquialisms from americen teen movies etc - but i guess its set in britain as you live in britain, you have a cricket bat not a baseball bat and you mentioned graham gooch, he man etc. If its set in the uk use uk teen language it'll make it more convincing and the characters easier to relate too etc.

you could of course have the teenagers putting on american accents and so using the phrases. It would be prettygood from a comedy point of view tht these horror flick freaks imitate their movie heros. But being really serious about it.

Cool, I'd be interested to read the rest - is it finished?

Sian

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[deanl]

Thanks for reading. About the americanisms I dont know what you mean. Can you explain. give examples. Me and mmates speak like that. I think. I just wrote as I speak. I dont know maybe Ive watch too mant american movies.

[deanl]

Thanks for reading. About the americanisms I dont know what you mean. Can you explain. give examples. Me and my mates speak like that.(I think). I just wrote as I speak. I dont know maybe Ive watch too mant american movies.